I'll Be Gone

I'll Be Gone


Well you made me like a fool and I bet that you felt it,
I tried to look cool but you're so hot that I melted
I fell right through your traps and I'm finding a way to get out
Oh, it's a funny kind of a situation that I get myself into
I've looked for many answers but couldn't find out the reasons
I think it's my fault to learn some or lose some

But I won't fret about it
You're with someone else
I cannot wait, I'll be gone

Hoping that you'll see the world inside of me
I'll open up my heart and now it's free
Look up into my heart and you'll find you, you, you, you
I'm listening to your music but I don't want to sing
Because I can't catch its melody
But it's my life's forsaken right to be love, love, love, love,love

But I won't fret about it
You're with someone else
I cannot wait, I'll be gone
But there's no need to complicate
My time here is short
It is my fate, I'll be gone

I've been spending a lot of time just to check on the places
And going here and there just to try to see it clearer
But again it broke my heart
To see him kissing you
I guess I should have expected for that thing to happen
And I should stop myself for the self-talk and the yapping
But it's what I cannot do
My middle name is stupid

But I won't fret about it
You're with someone else
I cannot wait, I'll be gone
But there's no need to complicate
My time here is short
It is my fate, I'll be gone

Hoping that you'll see the world inside of me
I'll open up my heart and now it's free
Look up into my heart and you'll find my love is yours
So please, oh please, what plea, Don't,
Oh, I hate myself now
For my time here is short
And this is my fate
I'll be gone...

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Acoustic Sensitivity wrote:I'll Be Gone


Well, you made me like a fool and I bet that you felt it << Add a comma

I tried to look cool but you're so hot that I melted << I liked this line!

I fell right through your traps and I'm finding a way to get out

Oh, it's a funny kind of a situation that I get myself into

I've looked for many answers but could not find out the reasons << I feel that could not should be couldn't. It makes it flow better.

I think it's again my fault to learn some or lose some << you don't need again, so take it out.

But I won't fret about it

You're with someone else

I cannot wait, I'll be gone

Hoping that you'll see the world inside of me

I'll open up my heart and now it's free

Look up into my heart and you'll find you, you, you, you

I'm listening to your music but I don't want to sing

Because I don't get its melody I think that you need a stronger word then 'get.'

But it's my life's forsaken right to be love, love, love, love,love

But I won't fret about it

You're with someone else

I cannot wait, I'll be gone

But there's no need to complicate

My time here is short

It is my fate, I'll be gone

I've been spending a lot of time just to check on the places

And going here and there just to try to see it clearer

But again it broke my heart

To see him kissing you

I guess I should have expected for that thing to happen << This was insanely wordy. I don't know how you could cut it down and still make it fit the music that it goes to...

And I should stop myself for the self-talk and the yapping

But it's what I cannot do

My middle name is stupid

But I won't fret about it

You're with someone else

I cannot wait, I'll be gone

But there's no need to complicate

My time here is short

It is my fate, I'll be gone


Hoping that you'll see the world inside of me

I'll open up my heart and now it's free

Look up into my heart and you'll find my love is yours

So please, oh please, what plea, don't, I hate myself now << There were some typos in this, so I don't know what you were getting at.

For my time here is short

And this is my fate

I'll be gone...


Wow. This was really good, even beautiful. I could see this in a song, lol, or on MTV. Good job. I liked it, and I'm not very good at critiquing lyrics, so I hope this was helpful!

BBB



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